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Marigold-Glow by ~astera:iconastera:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Nature > Open




marigold-glow

i heard a call
the wet plucking of footsteps in mud
April with ratted hair and coarse-sacking clad
begging at my door

i offered her scraps of toast
and the last third of the pot of coffee
she gulped
dry lips smacking like leaves in the wind
her winter-worn teeth tearing

a colour rose to her cheeks
marigold-glow

she thanked me
by burying herself in the garden
and erupting several weeks later
all ebony-rose and chaos
on the lawn
©2004-2009 ~astera
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Author's Comments

I like a line or two. I like the idea that I had as opposed to the actual forming of it on paper.

I post trash to verify my living and breathing.

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~i-apathy Apr 6, 2004, 9:10:06 AM
While at times I'm not entirely sure of what you are trying to get across, I really like the poem overall and the reaction I got from it: spring being fed or nourished and causing flowers to bloom, etc. I have the image in my head but I can't put it into words *shakes head* I hate when that happens.

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When all else fails, blame curiosity.
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~astera Apr 6, 2004, 11:40:10 AM
"april is the cruellest month..."

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happy makes me a modern girl
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~astera Apr 6, 2004, 11:40:24 AM
thankyou!!

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happy makes me a modern girl
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~extramundane Apr 6, 2004, 2:42:49 PM
Liking the personification of April in the first stanza. and the ebony-rose and chaos. *smiles*
-ash
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~littledeer Apr 11, 2004, 1:16:55 AM
Actually.. I think each line fits.. works.. well even. Beautifully captured sentiment.. and very creatively expressed! This is a poem. :rose:

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There are no happy endings, because nothing.. ever ends...
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~pathetical Apr 12, 2004, 2:21:26 AM
Very, very occasionally, it pays off to hit the Random Deviation button. This is one of those occasions. I really enjoyed reading this poem. The only line I'm not sure about is 'her winter-worn teeth tearing' - it seems a little too harsh for the overall tone of the poem, particularly with that alliteration, and I'm not sure I understand the transition from that to the next line. But the personification of April is spot-on. It's kind of like Keats' 'To Autumn' working in reverse.

You manage to capture a great deal of intensity and meaning in this short poem. Wonderfully consistent images. Highly appropriate for this time of year. All in all, I'm going to :+fav: on this, and maybe check out some more of your gallery:)

Aw, you've gone and got me in a good mood now.

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I'm a girl, dammit.
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~astera Apr 12, 2004, 9:52:03 AM
it is comments like this that make posting worthwhile. thankyou so much :)

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happy makes me a modern girl
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